Story Opener

In our Booster sessions we have been looking at different and interesting ways of beginning our stories. This week we focused on writing a description, the opening line was….Ali stood silently, looking at the door, with a slow creaking sound it opened. Taking a deep breath, Ali walked inside

It was dark. Darker than any room Ali had entered before. A rush of air brushed past his head as the door slammed shut! The only light left to guide Ali was a faint blue glow, coming from a box. It got lighter. The box slowly started to open…..

by George

Suddenly the door slammed behind him! Ali turned around, hesitating, should he leave or not? He started walking forward, away from the door. It felt like he was walking forever. Finally, he reached a stone spiral staircase, he started to walk up the stairs, they seemed never-ending.

by Edie

 He turned the handle and walked inside. The room was immense and extremely spacious. There on a chair, big enough to fit six adults, were two angry-looking ferocious Alsatians. Both were staring Ali straight in the eyes. He turned and ran!

by Sam

The ghastly aroma of rotting corpses hit him like a bullet up his nostril. Suddenly the ancient mouldy door slammed behind Ali and nearly sliced his finger off. Surely it must have been the wind, Ali tried to reassure himself, but even he didn’t believe that. There was a slit of white light seeping through a crack in a boarded up window.

By Maia

 Ali stepped through the empty hole and with a loud crash the boulder slammed back into place. Then he was hit by the foul stench of rotting eggs. Bile was rising up into his mouth. What is this place? Ali murmured to himself.

By Aidan

Can you suggest any changes which would improve our writing?

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4 Responses to “Story Opener”


  1. 1 Anika March 31, 2011 at 16:40

    WOW! Same starting sentences but differant opening paragraph’s. It’s good to know that everyone has differant idea’s because if people have the same idea’s for creativewriting it get’s kind of BORING so good work guys!

  2. 2 Adam April 1, 2011 at 19:14

    You guys are amazing! It sounds like part of a JK Rowling book, they are awesome!!

  3. 3 Edie April 2, 2011 at 13:42

    WOW. They’re all so amazing, I can’t believe all the ideas you had. Well done.

  4. 4 Bethany April 6, 2011 at 07:50

    I love the way that in Edie’s she uses alliteration,’stone spiral staircase.


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